Hi Ogul,

You could say "I can see travel in your fortune / future" or "You will be going on a journey / voyage / trip" delete where applicable :-)

"Please have your credit card ready ... " :-)

Here is the result!

http://www.vimeo.com/21175455

How this video can be improved??

Ogul,

Overall I liked it, but it's just too long.

If you're intending this as a promo to sell your services, it could be cut in half. It needs to be paced better and the titles near the end need to be put into 'real' English.

Like the music.

Tom

Thank you Tom,
I'm very well aware of it and I trust to friends from forum on this subject!
Please feel free to make necessary corrections. I'll really appreciate them.

Besides, the touble for me is that I need German & French of these wordings:))

"There is travel in your future" or "I can see travel in your future"
"to a sunny destination"
"which is also exotic"
"mmm, let me think.... to Cyprus!"
"to Rocks Hotel! Room 404"
"Have your credit card ready!"
"This is just the beginning!"
"all you ever need is here"
"If you are interested in this video"
"and want your Resort on Blu-Ray disc"
"just contact me!"
.........

OGUL,
Would be happy to help.

Send me just the text you are using in an email (via my name above) and I'll get it back to you shortly - English only I am afraid..

Tom

Hello Ogul,
I watched it twice before I realized who you are targeting... I think.
You're promoting yourself to come and video resort hotels and vacation spots for their own promotions... you provide them on DVD or Blu-Ray. Very nice...
* * *
With tiny text in a thin version as you designed it, I would recommend a black shadow to keep the text from disappearing against some similarly colored background - especially if you're going to lower the opacity. There were a couple of spots where the text completely blended into the video. I'm not sure if it is the final version of the text since you're getting some assistance with the wording and the grammar from others. I believe a single color for all the text throughout the video might serve your purpose better to not distract the viewer from the wonderful colors of the venues you show in the video. In that fashion, the viewer becomes accustomed to the text color and can identify it without being distracted from the views. Personally, I would make the text larger since you want the viewers (owners and managers) to read the text and get your message - not simply to enjoy the view of a competitor's hotel.
* * *
Additionally, I'd alter the music ... slow for contemplative gardens and winding paths; faster for sporting events or nightlife shots; and contemporary for structural shots of the rooms or the grounds from balconies and such... (just my opinion) - in order to appeal to a larger audience and show the owners and managers that you will produce a promotional piece for a larger age group... (I have no idea whether that sort of thing is even a consideration for you ... blush)
The Disney promotionals and the Carnival cruise promotionals demonstrate that sort of thing - quick shots of the kids having fun and quick shots of the parents having some time alone. . .
* * *
You are moving right along as you indicate in the narrative. . . I like your approach...
I know you asked for help with the English, and I barged in with a review of the whole project...
I know you know your audience better than any of us... my views above are only mine ... and you may disregard them if they seem inappropriate for the topic here... I fully understand.
I'm really just trying to help. . .

Until that time ... Earl J.

get rid of the credit card statement, has a negative connotation. I think someone suggested it purely as a joke.

Here is final result, but still open to last retouches!

http://www.vimeo.com/22197576

Thanks to all for their help!
Special thanks to :
Earl J who encouraged me a lot.This was that I needed most.
Rory Cooper for his veg files (04:23)
Johnny Roy for his mercalli correction (00:27)

One more question! How do you say it in a nice way:)
"...and on the way of return / while returning your home
you'll suddenly realize / understand that you have left / forgot
a part of your heart in Cyprus"

Thanks all again.

I love this forum:)

"and on the way home you suddenly realize that you have left a part of your heart in Cyprus"

I am no poet, so I am sure others could do better.