Comments

Grazie wrote on 1/20/2007, 2:04 AM
Great Stuff! Excellent creative usage of chroma and blends - loved it!

Points I would have done:

#1 - You have some places where the camera judders-up/down. Remove them. Just looks darn amateur and spoils what is a neat project.

#2 - The back-end credits take too long to disappear.

#3 - You are holding-on the very beautiful singer, at the end, too long for me.

#4 - IMO the intro, with the spinning Record sleeve lacks relevance to rest of clip. Yes use the Sleeve, but maybe at the end? Use the Butterfly motif as the PUNCH-UP Hook! Use it boldly right at the start.

#5 - The song IS about butterflies. You have a great "Logo" motif of the BF on a flower. IMO you could have made more of this.

#6 - I'm not a great fan of dissolves which dissolve to something just similar. Almost looks like a jump-cut?

#7 - At 55secs you have what looks like interlace jaggies? Sort it out.

#8 - From 42 > 48 you have some "wandering" zoom outs? Yeah? Looks like you were uncertain?

#9 - LOVED the gorgeous section from 1:00 up to 1:28! Smashing .. however, some of the FXs have an abrupt finish. I'm sure you could use a smooth off K/F there? Ah go on with yah!

#10 - Again with the JUMP ups at 1:28. IMO spoils the section just seen?

#11 - More judders at 2:14? Was there a "BOARD" she was tapping her foot on, that transferred to the tripod?

#12 - Appreciated the framing at 2:05! Neat angles used!

#13 - Eh? Colour Correction from 2:38 > 2:39? Get rid!!

#14 - 3:02 > 3:04 dodgy zoom-in. Kinda stutters left<>right?

#15 - 3:15 WOW! Loved the lighting here! An that HAIR!!!

#16 - 3:39 .. oh my .. really bad horiz judder . .and on the finish too?

You have some GREAT shots. Really you do! With a bit, and it it is only a little bit of adjust, IMO, you could have a real winner!! A simple song, saung simply with simple effects works every time. You have the stuff - just a bit more attention to detail.

I know - I've been there!!!

Hey guy, only trying to assist another Veg-Head.





garo wrote on 1/20/2007, 5:29 AM
Hej Grazie! I really appreciate the time you put into reviewing/critiqing the video. Most of them I was aware of - others I hadn't given much or any thought to. The production needs quite a bit of cleaning up to sumerise - I'm not getting paid for it so it will be in my spare time but it's a fun and eductional experiance! Linda is a very nice person and it's fun to work with her too!
Thanks again! //Garo
farss wrote on 1/20/2007, 6:09 AM
Can't disagree with any of what Grazie is saying.
Here's a tip, instead of a zoom use a push.
A dolly is more work and you might need to adjust focus but it just looks that much better.
Grazie wrote on 1/20/2007, 6:57 AM
"I'm not getting paid for it so it will be in my spare time but it's a fun and eductional experiance!

WRONG! - If you AREN'T getting paid for it and show it on that platform we now have, it becomes your CV.

Soooo... you have even MORE reason to be fussy. I do understand your sentiments, but this is a craft and as such - AND I HAVE A LONG WAY TO GO TOO! - all your pieces need to be what you want out there.

At present I have stuff out there which needs more work on. I'll admit to that. But as you have taken the time and courage to bring it here, then I would not be correct in at least disagreeing with your comment. AND - IMO - I know you have a superb winning eye too.

Sorry mate! I don't accept your reasoning. AND I have said the same too - Lol!

OK, I want to be able to say to someone here, in the UK, that I have this Scandinavian colleague who makes really beautiful music vids. Go see his latest on U-Tube! - Yeah?

Remember Uncle Vic's comment about - This IS show business - No Business! No Show! - Business doesn't NEED to mean PAID for. It may come, but ALL of what you, we and I do IS somewhere related to this funny ole game and ultimately can lead you/we/I to ££ $$ or whatever.

And yes Linda looks a great artists - she sounds like it! AND your video does her loads of justice.





UlfLaursen wrote on 1/20/2007, 8:25 AM
Thanks for sharing - I liked the song a lot...

Mycket bra... ;-) (very good)

Can you buy the song somewhere online?

Rgds.

/Ulf - Denmark
Steve Mann wrote on 1/21/2007, 12:50 AM
"Here's a tip, instead of a zoom use a push."

Gee, when I say that "Real videographers don't zoom", I get raked over the coals.....

Steve
garo wrote on 1/21/2007, 1:18 AM
Grazie! You're absolutly and totally 100% correct in that every project/assignment should be thought of in the same sence of achivemnet. I mearly meant that I am not able to devote my full attention to this particular one at the moment. I had a wedding job last summer that was allowed only a minimal budget. I wasn't happy about that but did a job worth considerably more. It paid off in the long run, as you infered, because friends of the "cheapies" saw it and hired me for a much better, larger project. So I'll be back with the Butterflies video and see it it flyes better next time (pun intended!)

Thanks to all for the input! Garo